Simply Simple

I had never imagined of writing  something like this that I have written below. Please read and post your response on this..

Is Duniya ke rango ke saath kismat badlti hain,
tadapti hain yeh badal aur yeh samah jab suraj apni tez par hota hain,
har savera ek naya josh lekar aata hain,
pattaro se pani bhi nikal aata hain jab kudrat tumahara saath deta hain,
kash hum kehne ka mauka nahin dena chahte lekin waqt hum se sab karwata hain,
yeh mausam ke Gane badalo main suraj ki kiran ek asha lati hain,
Waqt se pehle hum kabhi kuch nahin pate kudrat ko vada hain hum apni kismat se ladenge, jeetenge,
aaj bhi woh bachpana hamari chehre pe hasi le aati hain jab hume bachpana door hote dikhta hain..

I would like to request to give me feedback on this..